I wrote a bedtime story for littles, feedback?

[datdaddy24]

I wrote a bedtime yesterday and i wanna get some feedback! If you wanna use it feel free (if its even good haha).

 

Once upon a time there was a princess. She was beautiful in her perfect purple dress. This princess lived on the top of one of the biggest hills on the planet. Bigger than Mount Everest itself. The only way for the princess to become a queen was for a prince to climb that hill and ask for her hand in marriage.

Only the chosen one would be able to make the three day climb, and no one knew who it was. Many attempted the climb, many didn’t make it. But one day, a Prince came to the bottom of the hill, looked up, and told himself he was the chosen one, and began his climb.

At times it grew cold to the point he would be close to freezing. At times it would be blazing hot and be close to burning up. But after the hard three day journey, he mad it to the top and knocked on that door of the princesses house, on one knee. When the door swung open, it was love at first sight.

The Princess and Prince married and became king and queen, and lived on that hill as one, and lived happily ever after.

The End.

[shycub101]

I love it

[datdaddy24]

thanks 

[TwilightSparklez]

Awww I really really love it

[Guest LeftyGuitar]

Short, but a nice little story. A good story for littles with a happy ending.

[Guest ~Luna Rawrs~]

I liked it too cx

[Guest littleaddie]

I love ittttt u should write more

[LilGiggles]

awwww.... that was cute I loved it!

[minahbird]

More stories! Pweeze? I love it

[datdaddy24]

Thx for all the feedback! Ill keep writing