I wrote a story, my first one!

[Guest Esteliah]

If you'd like to read it, here is the link

 

http://my.w.tt/UiNb/WGoyIxJHLz

 

It's called 'She'

It's going to be quite cutesy and full of mystery, like me!    
It's DDLG orientated... Word of warning I'm bad at grammar! XD  

 

Any feedback/comments would be lovely my cookies

Theres a picture of the cover below (not mine)

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Who is she, exactly? 

I know nothing of her, yet my love knows no bounds for her.

How do I tell her I love her so?

  

Following in his father's footsteps, Mr.Devlyn is a newly trained assassin and takes on his first big job. However, upon finding his target, he knows exactly just who 'She' is. The love that he has been looking for, is right there in front of his eyes, but 'She' is also on the hit list. 

 

With his heart torn in two, just what will Devlyn do?

Edited January 8, 2017 by Esteliah

[shadowrider]

Hello Esteliah,

 I like the story thus far and am interested to see where this journey takes your characters. I like how you are setting the scenes and describing details and colors to give me, the reader, a sense of being in the story. Every small detail lets me envision the room or town or even expression on a face and makes me more a part of the tale. After all I think we read to get caught up in the moment and to either love or hate the characters as the story unfolds. I look forward to the next installment and learning more about She and Mr. Devlyn, and to see how he will handle the upcoming dilemma I sense is brewing. I also look forward to see how you build on their physical as well as personal traits to bring us closer to them.

Thanks you for sharing and happy writing.

[Guest Esteliah]

Hello Esteliah,

 I like the story thus far and am interested to see where this journey takes your characters. I like how you are setting the scenes and describing details and colors to give me, the reader, a sense of being in the story. Every small detail lets me envision the room or town or even expression on a face and makes me more a part of the tale. After all I think we read to get caught up in the moment and to either love or hate the characters as the story unfolds. I look forward to the next installment and learning more about She and Mr. Devlyn, and to see how he will handle the upcoming dilemma I sense is brewing. I also look forward to see how you build on their physical as well as personal traits to bring us closer to them.

Thanks you for sharing and happy writing.

Thankyou so so much for your kind words

[Guest Esteliah]

I updated the story with part two! Heres the link if anyone wants to read XD

https://www.wattpad.com/359667802-she-a-ddlg-love-story-part-2-%27she%27-messages-me

[Guest Mango the froot with boobs]

Hullo!

 

I started reading the story and I really like the way you write! I'm excited to see where it goes.